My feedback regarding the writing would be that the presentation is more like a talk with a slide deck. In my opinion, the style of presentation detracts and distracts from the written content.<p>In terms of the submission here on Hacker News. It is customary to just submit the link to the article and then if necessary comment upon it. When a new submission contains both a link and a comment, only the comment will be part of the Hacker News story.<p>Good luck.