Rule number one: if you don't understand something,<span class="bbc_u">ask me</span>.  I can't read minds, and if I think I've been crystal clear (while being clear as mud) it'll never get cleared up if nobody speaks up and tells me I'm not being clear.<br/><br/>UPDATE:<br/><br/>Back to the drawing board, please, Star.  Please review what I've sent you on kickers.  If you have trouble understanding that material, keep asking until you get it.<br/><br/>You keep giving me backstory...<em>and kickers are not backstory</em>.  They should be dynamic, active, something that throws your character off balance and forces him into motion.  I am going to formally ask that you re-write that post in full.  (That said, the backstory you have is good and solid, so please make sure you keep it around somewhere!  It just isn't a kicker.)<br/><br/>Kaizen's post isn't really a good kicker, either, because while he at least starts out going somewhere Sorcerous, I have no idea what he's trying to do, or what's driving him.  I may ask him to re-write as well.<br/><br/>Also, both of you need to make two rolls.  One for binding strength (appropriate score versus your starter Demon's Will), the other for possible Humanity loss (Humanity versus itself).<br/><br/>I'll post what you have to beat shortly.