Also Tagan, I did want to say that in no way was I intending to make you feel bad or anything like that. I could have worded what I said with a lot less hostility. I work in customer service for a major financial institution listening to people yell at me because they have poor money management skills while having to treat them like living saints regardless of how much they swear and curse. I also spent many, many years in the military doing similar high-security operations. I understand all too well wanting to put that real-world knowledge to use. And it's a good thing to do so! That saying 'write what you know' is very true, and your scene is not bad by any means. Keep it up, just remember: keep it simple in practice even if it's complex in theory. Players don't want to work too hard at fun, and when the obvious course of action doesn't seem so obvious they can get frustrated. I do love that you keep things moving though! And I am sorry for being so short with you.