I think its a very good backstory Carny. The Jeskai actually killing the ainok is not exactly their standard method of fighting, but it could make sense as they were alone in a foreign land, maybe even a little hungry and desperate. Even the calm and meditative monks can be caught off guard, especially the Jesaki. The Jeskai giving you the sword is a bit strange (in that they would have it to begin with), so maybe think of an alternate way to acquire it, but its not a must. I liked the leaving ritual of the Ainok. You mention "Prey came whether she called it or not", have you switched fire for food?<br/><br/>Finally, this may not be a problem as it could just be Peh-Ma's perception of things, but I don't think the Ojutai or Jeskai flat out win vs. the Temur. The Peh-Ma and her ainok pack mates by the sounds of it were just level 1 warriors, which explains how they lost, but I think more seasoned warriors of the Temur could hold their own for the most part. Due to their dedication to mastery, the average Ojutai is probably a level higher than the average Temur warrior, but the clan-kin have a numbers advantage.<br/><br/>But yeah, other than those minor issues I really liked it, glad you're in this game. Any idea what her immediate goals would be?