Alrighty, looks decent, but incomplete. From a quick glance-over, I can tell you that Mage's don't use the Treasure background, they use Wonder (which includes magic stuff from other origins; fetishes, natural artifacts, what-have-you). The action-boosting treaure would be Wonder 3 (for time 3 for the effect).<br/><br/>The Fae connection comes right out of left field. Why would a fiona train her in the first place? Why would he/she take that risk? How does he/she even know catalina?<br/>How would an intellgence 2 person be a A/B student?<br/>What's her dynamic resonance?<br/>Why does she have melee 5?<br/><br/>I know that this is just a first draft, just things to consider when you finish it up. Don't forget to add the questions when you're done.