Well, since you posted her here, I'll also respond in public. Perhaps that is for the best, as it might give others a chance to see how I might evaluate character applications.<br/><br/>All in all I like her. What I am not completely certain is how you square Hot-Blooded with Patient. Perhaps "hot-blooded" as one of her strongest aspects is a bit much? You could replace it with "high tolerance to alcohol" just for a fun quirk and to mention that again?<br/><br/>Why did she develop this strong interest in fighter planes? Was a family member involved with the military? Did she grow up around a military base? If you say she just is this way that's okay, but perhaps it would be interesting to develop that part of her background a bit more?<br/><br/>Her rank: Given that you state that she isn't really all that suited to the military life, I am tempted to rule her a 2nd Lt. If you really want her to be a 1st Lt., that rank will probably be probationary and something she will have to work on keeping.<br/><br/>And don't worry about the "personality" part. Some people like to add it to a profile, some don't. As long as I get enough from the character profile to get a solid idea on a character's personality I am not worried if someone spelly it out in detail or not.