Hi everyone:<br/><br/>Please put your character name and location at the head of your posts.<br/><br/>Please write in the past tense.<br/><br/>Villain - please would you write more. You're pretty much 1-lining here. Look at how much the other players are writing and please try to match that if you can. More description is needed please, more reference to the events around your character and perhaps some reference to what the other player characters and NPCs are doing if that fits the scene.<br/><br/>Also please watch out for modern language: 'evacing' is a modern term probably from Vietnam originally, try to remember to keep a 1950s set of language in your head if you can. WW2 combat-speak is the best to aim for if you need it.<br/><br/>(Urban – the 'game over man' remark is a modern idiom too! LOL)<br/><br/>Thank you everyone.