Nim, your character is fine except for the part about the Drow sparing your character and giving her encouraging words. Drow see ALL other races as inferior and worth nothing but slavery or death or perhaps in the case of Archrand and foreign merhants, as useful means to an end; but no more. That Drow female would have gladly have killed her or enslaved her without a second thought. I will need you to change that. Also weakness is seen as anathema, and is purged whenever possible and if that Drow had seen that girl would have seen only weakness in her, thus even more reason your character would have been killed.<br/><br/>How she heard about the Drow transformation also seemed a bit flimsy, to easy. Drow are only talked about in public in whispers or in angered frustration. Your character could have heard normal rumors and through much quiet investigation come to discover Malina's network and through that come to realize there is a way to become a Drow. That is your best bet unless you can think up something better.<br/><br/>The skin color can be a bit darker yes.<br/><br/>Otherwise, the rest is acceptable.