I did not even touch on the fact he has no clan status.  Especially in a clan with rigid hierarchy.   Let along his first obligation is to the clan through the blood bond.   Second his concept does not fit the traditional choice of the Tremere.  However, that does not preclude. Because they will embrace for need.  Though hardly think the power structure of pyramid scheme.  Would allow to keep such wealth.  And I haven't even hit on the generation yet.  I have repeated stated that if wanted to post an elder.  I expected a tie in to canon characters.  It is easy to hunt up genealogies online on the game.   Tie in your character at some point.   Especially in the realm of the Tremere.  This is just about as paramount as say the Ventrue.    The char just needs to be reworked from top to bottom.