Some small edits would be good then so that the posts made sense, some remarks hinting at making the continuity work correctly since as it stands its highly confusing. Fallen Feather's post coming after Chrystal's when the action it describes was ocurring before it is the most confusing post. Perhaps Chrystal, you could cut your post out and place it after Fallen's with an opening reference to Linda guiding Rayn away from the Chinese girl, with Fallen's post ending with a similar observation.