<div class="quoteheader"><div class="topslice_quote"><a href="https://elliquiy.com/forums/index.php?topic=28832.msg1109189#msg1109189">Quote from: Asherah on 03-02-2009, 02:27:12</a></div></div><blockquote class="bbc_standard_quote">I have been busy looking over characters.  Thus it has slowed my involvement.   What I post is not anyway meant as offense.   Instead I am posting here, for simple reasons do not have to correct the same mistakes over and over.<br/><br/><br/>SleepingFerret -Tremere Primogen  Lance VanZant.   Denied until reworked.<br/><br/><br/>First he does no have access to any out of reach hardware.  Regardless of how much resources you have put down.  You have nothing that allows you to even sniff out such items.  Contacts a ATF agent and the DA does not gain you such.  Contacts are limited, general information can be gleamed.  Not in depth, that would fall in the line of an Ally.  But more then that, you need influences.  I see nothing in influences.  You have companies that don't even have the proper permits or contacts to even construct weapons.  When I say contacts, once again harking back to influences.   <br/><br/>This is not an elder, this is a pumped up ancilla  combat monster.   You don't even come close to being a primogen.     And the amount of rituals taken is silly.   Considering the writeup, the age of your character.  This is min maxing at its best.  This is not even close to be a Tremere.  Or understanding of an elder.   <br/><br/>_________<br/><br/>Vandren - John Sifridus Lederer    What do the influences cover<br/><br/>Alright what influences does he have in what.  Transportation,  Law enforcement,  underworld.  Influence is not a blanket cover everything.   Follow RubySlippers lead, in how she designated her influences.<br/><br/>_______<br/><br/>Playfulchick76 -  Abigail Sinclair  imcomplete character.   No assigning of points for attributes, heck the whole thing needs to be worked.   If having a problem hun, give me a pm.  I can assist you.  <br/><br/><br/><br/><br/><br/><br/><br/><br/></blockquote><div class="quotefooter"><div class="botslice_quote"></div></div><br/>Playfulchick got some help from me since the sheet is a start, with her background I recommeneded some points here and there and gave her some ideas for merits. And sent her a easy to use ,I hope, character creation system cheat sheet.