Okay, I finished reading the post.  It was very well written May.<br/><br/>These are just suggestions, not trying to tear anything apart.<br/><br/>I feel like the setting and tone need a bit of adjustment.  These are the first days of the apocalypse.  There should be a feeling of confusion, panic, and discovery.  By knowing that people are going to die from a simple bite it takes away from the discovery phase.  For the average person to automatically know to go for the head removes the "surprise" factor that comes with impaling or beheading a "walker" and have it still shamble toward the character.  The scene with the zombie pulling itself apart coming after Freya was great and enjoyable to read.<br/><br/>Setting: We discussed a "safe" place in the gas station, at least momentarily.  Having people turn there should be something that happens when we've got the full cast there, in my opinion.  I think business should be going on like normal on the first day.  I'm not sure why my character would stop at a place that has a pile of bodies outside its fences.  It's only been a day since the outbreak and people, in general, should still be adjusting to what's happened.  I also get the image of "walkers" simply pushing against the fences kind of like the scene from "Resident Evil 2" movie, where they're dumping the clone's body.  Again, not a place that seems safe for people to meet and gather.<br/><br/>I personally would prefer if the gas station was further outside of Seattle than what Baal wants.  To me it doesn't make a whole lot of sense for people to stop and hold up in a gas station that was ten minutes outside of Seattle, especially when the news reports start telling people to go into the cities in order to find safety.  A gas station that's 30-45 minutes away would seem to fit more nicely.  Also, a location that's 30-50 miles away from the University could share the same weather.<br/><br/>I agree with LittleKitten about reacting hostilely toward someone trying to bite me.  However, thinking someone would die from it is kind of unheard of.  In the early scenes of the show and book infections took much longer to turn someone, mostly due to the "discovery" phase.  Later on it seems the spread of the disease/virus through the body is much faster.  Also, it takes a random amount of time for the dead to awaken.  Those that the group sees reawaken initially should take some time and be a surprise for most, if not all.