It looks fine to me. There was just one thing, in her previous post Tabby cuddled Jess, so you may wish to make a reference to that. Your comment of 'looking at her' kind of makes it seem she's not close to Jess. It's your first post and I know it's often difficult to join an existing game and more-so to take over an existing character from someone else, but just chill and it'll be fine.<br/><br/>I am not totally sure how MsNikki wants to play it but I think while Tabby and Jess are very much in love they haven't talked much about D/s things, so while Jess would slide into the submissive role eventually (she and you can decide on the pacing) I'm not certain if she'd be having those thoughts just yet. On the other hand she<em>might</em>so its best if you sort out how the pacing of it goes with MsNikki.