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6351 John Coffey 71.04 The sentence in the fifth column has independent clasues linked by a comma without a coordinating conjunction. This is ungrammatical usage and it hurts clarity. Change the comma to a semicolon. Revise – generally agree with comment - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r6 that are marked with CID 6351. 6352 John Coffey 73.09 Garbled text: "Feedback can be contained is the QoS Control field". Change "is" to "in". Revise – generally agree with comment - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r6 that are marked with CID 6352. 6353 John Coffey 73.34 Garbled text: "Feedback can be contained is the QoS Control field". Change "is" to "in". Revise – generally agree with comment - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r6 that are marked with CID 6353. 6354 John Coffey 74.04 Anthropomorphism: "the TWT requesting STA expects". The STA is an object and does not "expect" anything. Reword to remove the Reject – if corporations are people, then it follows that STAs are people, see USA supreme cases which established these facts almost 200 years ago: – 17 U.S. 518 (1819) and – 125 U.S. 181 (1888) – also note that neither the 802.11 style guide nor the IEEE SA style guide mentions whatever that means… and furthermore, the entity in question, perhaps best described as an algorithm, has definite expectations of 0 0 0 0
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