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Journal examples: “Everything about our session pleased me: the smallness of the room; the noise of the janitor’s broom hitting the edge of the long hallway outside the door; the green of the sun, lighting the wall; and the old woman’s face blurred white with a beard. Most of the time we took turns, I began with my elementary text. Sentences of astonishing simplicity seemed to me lifeless and drab: “The boy ran from the rain…She wanted to sing…The kite rose in the blue.’ Then the old nun would read from her favorite books, usually biographies of early American presidents. Playfully she ran through complex, calling the words alive with her voice, making it seem that the author somehow was speaking directly to me. I smiled just to listen to her. I sat there and sensed for the very first time some possibility of fellowship between a reader and a writer, a communication, never intimate like that I heard spoken words at home convey, but nonetheless personal.” 64 Rodriguez, here, relies primarily on syntax and imagery to accurately convey this important moment. He takes the time to list in series the positive things about the session. This listing of various details with active diction helps the reader to conjure a real life image of the author’s perception. He even takes the time to convey the exact sentence of simplicity he read. The active diction of the sentences evoking various images seems “drab” to him. While the “blurred white” faced woman evokes a “ fellowship between the reader and writer”. The exchange between his words and the woman is a parallel to the transformation he feels with different literature. The sentence structure gets more complex as the author struggles internally to come to the realization of the “personal” fellowship he experiences. To mark the clarity in his thoughts toward the end of the passage makes a distinction between the “intimate” and “personal”. The italics here emphasize the clarity and confidence of the inner thoughts of the character at this point.
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