Finding short sentences for effect In this part of Five Children and It, a policeman is investigating reports that the children have been trying to spend gold money. Notes Where is the gold? Cyril desperately plunged his hands in his pockets, stood still a moment, and then began to laugh - an odd sort of laugh that hurt, and that felt much more like crying. His pockets were empty. So were the pockets of the others. For of course at sunset all the fairy gold had vanished away. ‘Turn out your pockets, and stop that noise,’ said the inspector. Cyril turned out his pockets, every one of the nine which enriched his Norfolk suit. And every pocket was empty. Underline the three sentences that have fewer than eight words. Think about why the writer, Edith Nesbit, decided to stop her storytelling at those points, and to break it into short sentences. What effect was she creating for the reader? Use the space next to the text to note down your thoughts. Read is the out loud. Make sure you use the punctuation marks ‘Where gold?’ to help you read with expression. Hearing the text will help you notice the effect it should have.
Finding short sentences for effect In this part of Five Children and It, a policeman is investigating reports that the children have been trying to spend gold money. Where is the gold? Cyril desperately plunged his hands in his pockets, stood still a moment, and then began to laugh - an odd sort of laugh that hurt, and that felt much more like crying. His pockets were empty. So were the pockets of the others. For of course at sunset all the fairy gold had vanished away. ‘Turn out your pockets, and stop that noise,’ said the inspector. Cyril turned out his pockets, every one of the nine which enriched his Norfolk suit. And every pocket was empty. Notes Underline the three sentences that have fewer than eight words. Think about why the writer, Edith Nesbit, decided to stop her storytelling at those points, and to break it into short sentences. What effect was she creating for the reader? Use the space next to the text to note down your thoughts. Read ‘Where is the gold?’ out loud. Make sure you use the punctuation marks to help you read with expression. Hearing the text will help you notice the effect it should have.
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