A more formal letter Now look below at the opening to a letter to parents about uniform. The words next to the letter show you what the writer was thinking as they wrote the letter: Dear Parents, This is polite and shows It is delightful to see just how respect for parents. smart most of our young people look in their new school uniform. Start on a positive note. However, a few students seem to be I should express this so that struggling to keep up the standards students not in correct uniform of the rest of the school. have made a mistake rather than being naughty. I have noticed that a small number of students seem to be unclear The phrase to be ‘seem about the rules about footwear. All is less accusing. unclear’ students should be wearing black This is a firm, no-nonsense lace-up shoes. Other colours and statement so that the message styles are not acceptable … of the letter does not get lost.
A more formal letter Now look below at the opening to a letter to parents about uniform. The words next to the letter show you what the writer was thinking as they wrote the letter: Dear Parents, It is delightful to see just how smart most of our young people look in their new school uniform. However, a few students seem to be struggling to keep up the standards of the rest of the school. I have noticed that a small number of students seem to be unclear about the rules about footwear. All students should be wearing black lace-up shoes. Other colours and styles are not acceptable … This is polite and shows respect for parents. Start on a positive note. I should express this so that students not in correct uniform have made a mistake rather than being naughty. The phrase ‘seem to be unclear’ is less accusing. This is a firm, no-nonsense statement so that the message of the letter does not get lost.
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