MY PAPA’S WALTZ wordiness [148 words] KEY – Sometimes, when people reflect upon youth, they view relationships differently than they did in the moment. Such is the case In the poem, “My ABUSIVE Papa’s Waltz”, IN WHICH Theodore Roethke describes the relationship between a father and his young son. THEIR DANCE It may seem a fun waltz, but the father was drunk, PERHAPS AN ALCOHOLIC, and “romp” the waltz was not easy for the CHILD. As they dance, the boy’s “right an alcoholic. , ear scraped a buckle” evidence that the father is being too rough, and although the father may not have intended to hurt HIS SON the child, the waltz between the father and son was not always a pleasant experience. The romping BECOMES THREATENING when pans slid from “the { you may choose to keep the more colloquial here } the kitchen shelf and the little boy, who is __CLEARLY AFRAID___________ ”, , has to hang on death”. Although the poet “like Add EVIDENCE MISSING IDEAS. – may have loved his father while he was a child, THE ALCOHOLISM AND years of neglect and emotional abuse have made him realize that his relationship with his father was more hurtful than loving. Can you find the errors? “punc”
MY PAPA’S WALTZ – wordiness [148 words] KEY Sometimes, when people reflect upon youth, they view relationships differently than they did in the moment. Such is the case In the poem, “My Papa’s Waltz”, IN WHICH Theodore Roethke describes the ABUSIVE relationship between a father and his young son. THEIR DANCE It may seem a “romp” fun waltz, but the father was drunk, PERHAPS AN ALCOHOLIC, and the waltz was not easy for the CHILD. an alcoholic. As they dance, the boy’s “right ear scraped a buckle” , evidence that the father is being too rough, and although the father may not have intended to hurt HIS SON the child, the waltz between the father and son was not always a pleasant experience. The romping BECOMES THREATENING { you may choose to keep the more colloquial here } when “the pans slid from the kitchen shelf ”, and the little boy, who is __CLEARLY AFRAID___________ , has to hang on “like death”. Add EVIDENCE – MISSING IDEAS. Although the poet may have loved his father while he was a child, THE ALCOHOLISM AND years of neglect and emotional abuse have made him realize that his relationship with his father was more hurtful than loving. Can you find the “punc” errors?