Indy-R Thesis Editing Practice: Student samples followed by revisions 1. The book The Beginning of Everything tells a story of Ezra and how his tragedies unfold. Throughout the beginning, Ezra’s life take twists and turns everywhere and even impacts his personality, Ezra would much prefer a vanilla cake, as he is spontaneous, fun loving, and everyone loves to be around him. 1. Robyn Schneider’s The Beginning of Everything tells a story of Ezra and how his tragedies unfold. Ezra’s life takes twists and turns everywhere and even impacts his personality. Despite all this chaos, Ezra would much prefer vanilla cake with chocolate icing as he is spontaneous, fun loving, and popular. 2. The character in the book that I read, No Summit out of Sight written by Jordan Romero and Linda LeBlance would probably prefer a brownie. Jordan is a full adventurer, and could definitely be considered an underdog. This book is a true story on how Jordan climbed all the seven summits. 2. No Summit out of Sight, by Jordan Romero and Linda LeBlanc, is a true story about how Jordan climbed all the seven summits. Jordan would probably prefer a brownie because he is a full adventurer and definitely an underdog. 3. This particular book has hooked my interests mainly because of the weird plot in this story. My book is called Unwind by Neal Shusterman. I hope you’ll get to read Unwind too. The first Character is Connor Lannister, assuming from his wild but caring behavior Connor would likely be a strawberry shortcake. 3. Unwind by Neal Shusterman has a weird plot and interesting characters. Because of Connor Lannister’s wild but caring behavior, he would probably love strawberry shortcake.
Indy-R Thesis Editing Practice: Student samples followed by revisions 1. The book The Beginning of Everything tells a story of Ezra and how his tragedies unfold. Throughout the beginning, Ezra’s life take twists and turns everywhere and even impacts his personality, Ezra would much prefer a vanilla cake, as he is spontaneous, fun loving, and everyone loves to be around him. 1. Robyn Schneider’s The Beginning of Everything tells a story of Ezra and how his tragedies unfold. Ezra’s life takes twists and turns everywhere and even impacts his personality. Despite all this chaos, Ezra would much prefer vanilla cake with chocolate icing as he is spontaneous, fun loving, and popular. 2. The character in the book that I read, No Summit out of Sight written by Jordan Romero and Linda LeBlance would probably prefer a brownie. Jordan is a full adventurer, and could definitely be considered an underdog. This book is a true story on how Jordan climbed all the seven summits. 2. No Summit out of Sight, by Jordan Romero and Linda LeBlanc, is a true story about how Jordan climbed all the seven summits. Jordan would probably prefer a brownie because he is a full adventurer and definitely an underdog. 3. This particular book has hooked my interests mainly because of the weird plot in this story. My book is called Unwind by Neal Shusterman. I hope you’ll get to read Unwind too. The first Character is Connor Lannister, assuming from his wild but caring behavior Connor would likely be a strawberry shortcake. 3. Unwind by Neal Shusterman has a weird plot and interesting characters. Because of Connor Lannister’s wild but caring behavior, he would probably love strawberry shortcake.