Plummer–L204 Spring 2012 Essay #1 draft feedback Really needs work Needs considerable Good but with Nicely done to meet assignment attention in revision room to improve Main idea no clear answer to the makes a stab at the has main idea in answers Q; connects and question; does not assignment, but main response to Q, but need theme & literary Answer to question/ address topics assigned idea not clearly stated; some clarification; may element; good to assignment may deviate from topic mention theme /element excellent, insightful but not identify analysis of text; thoughtful and doesn’t connect to insightful theme Second short story doesn’t mention mentions discusses Integrates well with main story Thesis no thesis thesis may be vague or thesis is an assertion thesis is an assertion implied rather than but could be more with enough specificity; overt; may appear later specific to elements of provides “road map.” in paper the text thesis is unconnected to integrated into intro. rest of the paper Structure: organization, disorganized; ¶s may be paragraphing may need overall structure clear; smooth, engaging intro paragraphing, and topic too long or too short additional attention paragraphs follow main and clear paragraphing; sentences not all paragraphs are idea, for most part “on topic”; some ¶s no helpful topic topic sentences for most difficult to follow sentences provides some topic every paragraph sentences, but could be transitions needed stronger, or added to may have weak some ¶s conclusion Avoiding plot mostly plot summary; has an angle from On the right track—but evidence appropriate summary; use of little or no discussion of which it recounts the has some plot summary ideas; is well integrated evidence; evidence. story, but is mostly plot that is not related to a into paragraph; uses development of the summary thesis about the lead-ins; elaborates on argument author’s use of plot significance of evidence may demonstrate an understanding of the some evidence present; text, but is descriptive gives more description has some analysis of references to plotting rather than analytical. than analysis evidence, but could use are in support of the more; evidence OK thesis statement Mechanics Sentence-level expression Conventions of literary analysis Citations Work on circled items Grammar/spelling Introducing works with title/author Providing in-text citations punctuation Invoking the author in discussion Formatting in-text Word choice Integrating quotations Providing works cited Clarity of individual sentences Using present tense TITLE Formatting works cited Referring to author by last name ADDITIONAL COMMENTS:
Plummer–L204 Spring 2012 Essay #1 draft feedback Really needs work to meet assignment Needs considerable attention in revision Good but with room to improve Nicely done Main idea and Answer to question/ assignment no clear answer to the question; does not address topics assigned makes a stab at the assignment, but main idea not clearly stated; may deviate from topic doesn’t connect to theme has main idea in response to Q, but need some clarification; may mention theme /element but not identify answers Q; connects theme & literary element; good to excellent, insightful analysis of text; thoughtful and insightful Second short story doesn’t mention mentions discusses Integrates well with main story Thesis no thesis thesis may be vague or implied rather than overt; may appear later in paper thesis is unconnected to rest of the paper thesis is an assertion but could be more specific to elements of the text thesis is an assertion with enough specificity; provides “road map.” integrated into intro. Structure: organization, paragraphing, and topic sentences disorganized; ¶s may be too long or too short no helpful topic sentences paragraphing may need additional attention not all paragraphs are “on topic”; some ¶s difficult to follow transitions needed overall structure clear; paragraphs follow main idea, for most part provides some topic sentences, but could be stronger, or added to some ¶s smooth, engaging intro and clear paragraphing; topic sentences for most every paragraph may have weak conclusion Avoiding plot summary; use of evidence; development of the argument mostly plot summary; little or no discussion of evidence. may demonstrate an understanding of the text, but is descriptive rather than analytical. has an angle from which it recounts the story, but is mostly plot summary some evidence present; gives more description than analysis On the right track—but has some plot summary that is not related to a thesis about the author’s use of plot has some analysis of evidence, but could use more; evidence OK evidence appropriate ideas; is well integrated into paragraph; uses lead-ins; elaborates on significance of evidence references to plotting are in support of the thesis statement Mechanics Sentence-level expression Conventions of literary analysis Citations Work on circled items Grammar/spelling punctuation Word choice Clarity of individual sentences Introducing works with title/author Invoking the author in discussion Integrating quotations Using present tense TITLE Referring to author by last name Providing in-text citations Formatting in-text Providing works cited Formatting works cited ADDITIONAL COMMENTS: