Identifies Builds Plans to… Offers Demonstrates… Examples of and Comments “More” “Less” Useful The following statements illustrate the types of comments that might be written for a Project Approach, Project Implementation, or Budget section of an application. For each example, a comment that provides some information is presented, followed by a discussion of why the comment is unsatisfactory, which, in turn is followed by a more informative version of the comment. Strengths Less Useful: The proposal is aligned with the objective to prepare participants applicant’s program’s for employment in the healthcare sector. Discussion: The comment simply restates what was written in the application without indicating why this point is significant. More Useful: The proposed project is clearly aligned with the objective to prepare program’s participants for employment in the healthcare sector and leads to an industry-recognized certificate or degree. Specifically, the applicant proposes a program in which participants will receive training to become Certified Nursing Assistants (CNAs), initial job placement, and ongoing training to become Licensed Vocational Nurses (LVNs). (Pages 2-3) Less Useful: Third-party Agreements are included in the application. Discussion: The comment is too general and does not indicate the importance of this strength. More Useful: The roles and responsibilities of all personnel and partners are described clearly in the proposal. For example, signed third-party agreements are attached for each community partner that describes the leadership, experience, and commitment of each, as well as a timeline for the completion of an MOU. (Pages 20-26) Weaknesses Less Useful: The budget justification lacks sufficient details. Discussion: The comment does not give the basis for this conclusion. More Useful: The budget does not provide adequate justification for the amounts requested. For example, the line item detail includes $40,000 for travel, but does not provide calculations, unit costs, or estimation methods to show how the amount was derived. (Page 43) Less Useful: The method for determining outcomes and expected benefits is poor. applicant’s
Plans to… Identifies Builds Demonstrates… Offers Examples of “More” and “Less” Useful Comments The following statements illustrate the types of comments that might be written for a Project Approach, Project Implementation, or Budget section of an application. For each example, a comment that provides some information is presented, followed by a discussion of why the comment is unsatisfactory, which, in turn is followed by a more informative version of the comment. Strengths Less Useful: The applicant’s proposal is aligned with the program’s objective to prepare participants for employment in the healthcare sector. Discussion: The comment simply restates what was written in the application without indicating why this point is significant. More Useful: The proposed project is clearly aligned with the program’s objective to prepare participants for employment in the healthcare sector and leads to an industry-recognized certificate or degree. Specifically, the applicant proposes a program in which participants will receive training to become Certified Nursing Assistants (CNAs), initial job placement, and ongoing training to become Licensed Vocational Nurses (LVNs). (Pages 2-3) Less Useful: Third-party Agreements are included in the application. Discussion: The comment is too general and does not indicate the importance of this strength. More Useful: The roles and responsibilities of all personnel and partners are described clearly in the proposal. For example, signed third-party agreements are attached for each community partner that describes the leadership, experience, and commitment of each, as well as a timeline for the completion of an MOU. (Pages 20-26) Weaknesses Less Useful: The budget justification lacks sufficient details. Discussion: The comment does not give the basis for this conclusion. More Useful: The budget does not provide adequate justification for the amounts requested. For example, the line item detail includes $40,000 for travel, but does not provide calculations, unit costs, or estimation methods to show how the amount was derived. (Page 43) Less Useful: The applicant’s method for determining outcomes and expected benefits is poor.