<s>[INST] This is something I wrote:
"For a minute or two, I think I saw another person waiting to see Tamesha.  From then on it was just Tamesha and me.  She asked me to go through my history and tell her all about myself.  I opened up like a clam shell and shared so many things that I had never told anyone else.  I went home that day with a sense of relief.  I felt light as a feather and so much freer."

I'd like some feedback on this piece of writing.  I was going for a sense of intimacy and vulnerability with my character, and I'd like to know if you think I achieved that in this piece.

I'd also appreciate any suggestions you might have for improvement.

Overall, I think this is a good start... and I'm eager to get some feedback and suggestions from you.

I'm particularly interested in hearing about the use of similes in this piece.  I've used two of them ("opened up like a clam shell" and "light as a feather").  Do you think that these are effective ways to convey the character's emotions and state of mind?[/INST]