"::::::Separating the two adjectives in that way is kind of difficult to parse. How about removing the second instance of ""sex act"" - people will remember it from the sentence before. W'll have to fact check and justify saying that Santorum's comments were ""widely"" regarded as homophobic, or that ""some"" regarded Savage's definition as vulgar. It's probably the other way around, a few people were bothered by Santorum's comments and a lot of people were bothered by Savage's efforts. You can't equate the two because Savage isn't running for President and Santorum isn't writing a gay-friendly alternative press sex advice column. But we should reflect the facts on the ground as they say.  Do we have sources on how prevalent and strong people's opinions are, and is it worth indicating that in the lede? BTW, maybe you should start a new section with your proposal, or else just go for it and see if it sticks. I think we've talked so much that fewer people are reading anymore. Also, it's the weekend... a good time to gain consensus by default, bad time to get lots of comment. -    
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