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 :::::::The text looks okay to me but I'd drop the section on 'Heteronormativity' (can you source that claim, because I can't - I'm not saying the view doesn't exist - it's just that if you add info to page you must be able to source it).  Also I'd drop the 'Development' section which is quote-farm for John Stoltenberg - summarize his view and put it into the following section.  If you could I'd try to source some more of the page if you can.  But it is definitely an improvement on the current situation   "