Can you rewrite this email that I used a translator to convert from Korean to English to sound more like a native English speaker?

Dear [Insert Name],

I hope this email finds you well. I am writing to inquire about possible internship or collaboration opportunities within Global Golf Advisors. A recent graduate of Brown University with a degree in Computer Science-Economics, playing on the women's golf team developed a passion for golf and business strategy, and is excited to explore the intersection between the two fields.

Oliver Wyman's full-time job as a management consultant has been postponed to the end of the year, making it the perfect opportunity to pursue his interest in golf. I believe that an internship or collaboration with Global Golf Advisors will provide valuable experience and the opportunity to learn from industry experts.

I have attached my resume for your reference and look forward to hearing back. Thank you for considering my inquiry.

best,
[Insert Name]
system
kya aap is email ko phir se likh sakate hai ki maine ek anuvadak kaa upyog korian se angreji main ek deshi angreji vaktaa kii tarah adhik dhwani ke liye parivartit karne ke liye kiya tha?

priy [naam daalen],

aashaa he sab kushal mangal he.main vaishvik golf salaahkaaron ke bheetar sambhavit internship yaa sahyog ke avasaron ke bare main poochtacha karne ke liye likh rahaa hum.computer science-iconomics main degree ke saath brown uniwarsity ke ek haalia snaatak, mahila golf team main khilne se golf or vyavsaayik ranneeti ke liye ek junun viksit kiya gaya he, or donon kshetron ke bich chauraahey kaa pataa lagane ke liye utsahit he.

ek prabandhan salaahkaar ke rup main oliver vaayaman kii purnakalik naukari ko varsh ke ant tak sthagit kar diya gaya he, jisase yah golf main unki ruchi ko aage badhaane kaa sahi mauka he.meraa maananaa he ki vaishvik golf salaahkaaron ke saath ek internship yaa sahyog moolyawaan anubhav or udyog ke visheshgyon se seekhney kaa avasar pradaan karegaa.

maine aapke sandarbh ke liye apana rigyum sanlagn kiya he or waapas sunne ke liye tatpar hum.meri jaanch par vichaar karne ke liye dhanyavad.

shreshth,
[naam daalen]
user
priy [naam daalen],

aashaa he sab kushal mangal he.main vaishvik golf salaahkaaron ke saath sambhavit internship yaa asthaayee naukari ke avasar ke bare main poochne ke liye aapse sampark karnaa chahta tha.maine haal hi main brown uniwarsity se computer science-iconomics main degree ke saath snaatak kiya, jahaan maine mahila golf team main khelaa or golf or vyavsaayik ranneeti donon ke liye ek pyaar kii khoj kii.main vastav main in donon kshetron ke sangyojan kii kshamta ke bare main utsahit hum.

golf udyog main mere junun kaa pataa lagane kaa sahi mauka varsh ke ant tak oliver vaayaman main ek prabandhan salaahkaar ke rup main ek sthiti ke liye mere purnakalik prastaav ke sthagan ke kaaran utpann hua he.mujhe lagata he ki ek internship yaa alpakaalik/anubandh kii sthiti ke dauraan vaishvik golf salaahkaaron ke liye kaam karnaa mahatvapurn visheshgyata praapt karne kaa ek shandaar avasar hoga.

maine aapke sandarbh ke liye apana rigyum sanlagn kiya he or waapas sunne ke liye tatpar hum.meri jaanch par vichaar karne ke liye dhanyavad.

garmjoshi se,
[naam daalen]
assistant
<|system|>
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<|user|>
kya aap is email ko phir se likh sakate hai ki maine ek anuvadak kaa upyog korian se angreji main ek deshi angreji vaktaa kii tarah adhik dhwani ke liye parivartit karne ke liye kiya tha?

priy [naam daalen],

aashaa he sab kushal mangal he.main vaishvik golf salaahkaaron ke bheetar sambhavit internship yaa sahyog ke avasaron ke bare main poochtacha karne ke liye likh rahaa hum.computer science-iconomics main degree ke saath brown uniwarsity ke ek haalia snaatak, mahila golf team main khilne se golf or vyavsaayik ranneeti ke liye ek junun viksit kiya gaya he, or donon kshetron ke bich chauraahey kaa pataa lagane ke liye utsahit he.

ek prabandhan salaahkaar ke rup main oliver vaayaman kii purnakalik naukari ko varsh ke ant tak sthagit kar diya gaya he, jisase yah golf main unki ruchi ko aage badhaane kaa sahi mauka he.meraa maananaa he ki vaishvik golf salaahkaaron ke saath ek internship yaa sahyog moolyawaan anubhav or udyog ke visheshgyon se seekhney kaa avasar pradaan karegaa.

maine aapke sandarbh ke liye apana rigyum sanlagn kiya he or waapas sunne ke liye tatpar hum.meri jaanch par vichaar karne ke liye dhanyavad.

shreshth,
[naam daalen]</s>
<|assistant|>
priy [naam daalen],

aashaa he sab kushal mangal he.main vaishvik golf salaahkaaron ke saath sambhavit internship yaa asthaayee naukari ke avasar ke bare main poochne ke liye aapse sampark karnaa chahta tha.maine haal hi main brown uniwarsity se computer science-iconomics main degree ke saath snaatak kiya, jahaan maine mahila golf team main khelaa or golf or vyavsaayik ranneeti donon ke liye ek pyaar kii khoj kii.main vastav main in donon kshetron ke sangyojan kii kshamta ke bare main utsahit hum.

golf udyog main mere junun kaa pataa lagane kaa sahi mauka varsh ke ant tak oliver vaayaman main ek prabandhan salaahkaar ke rup main ek sthiti ke liye mere purnakalik prastaav ke sthagan ke kaaran utpann hua he.mujhe lagata he ki ek internship yaa alpakaalik/anubandh kii sthiti ke dauraan vaishvik golf salaahkaaron ke liye kaam karnaa mahatvapurn visheshgyata praapt karne kaa ek shandaar avasar hoga.

maine aapke sandarbh ke liye apana rigyum sanlagn kiya he or waapas sunne ke liye tatpar hum.meri jaanch par vichaar karne ke liye dhanyavad.

garmjoshi se,
[naam daalen]</s>
