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એક વેશ્યાની ગઝલ | શબ્દો છે શ્વાસ મારા
એક નવી રચના, મહિનાના દર પહેલા અને ત્રીજા શનિવારે…
(ભૌમિતિક મધ્યબિંદુ… … માથેરાન, જાન્યુઆરી,’03)
રાતને ધિક્કારતો બે જાંઘની વચ્ચેનો સૂર્ય,
રાત કેવળ પામતો બે જાંઘની વચ્ચેનો સૂર્ય.
દુનિયાભરનું આભ છો આળોટતું લાગે પગે,
પિંજરામાં આમ તો બે જાંઘની વચ્ચેનો સૂર્ય.
થૂંકદાની હોય ના તો મોઢું ક્યાં જઈ થૂંકશે ?
‘પચ્ચ્…’ દઈ પિચકારતો બે જાંઘની વચ્ચેનો સૂર્ય.
રાત આખી ખણખણાટી, હણહણાટીમાં જતી,
ને સવારે હાંફતો બે જાંઘની વચ્ચેનો સૂર્ય.
ભૂખ, પીડા, થાક, ઈચ્છા, માનના અશ્વો વિના ય,
રથ સતત હંકારતો બે જાંઘની વચ્ચેનો સૂર્ય.
જગ નથી તારું આ, છો અહીં વાત જગ આખાની હોય
શબ્દ પણ ક્યાં કાઢતો બે જાંઘની વચ્ચેનો સૂર્ય ?
તુજ થકી દીધાપણાંના આભમાં પાછો તને
રોગ થઈને શાપતો બે જાંઘની વચ્ચેનો સૂર્ય.
જ્યાં કદી ન આથમે અંધારું એ શેરીનું નામ
લાલ બત્તી પામતો બે જાંઘની વચ્ચેનો સૂર્ય !
48 thoughts on “એક વેશ્યાની ગઝલ”
Anonymous on November 11, 2006 at 7:42 pm said:
આ ગઝલ માટે અભિનંદન. આ પ્રકારનું લખવું અને એ પણ સાર્થક રૂપમાં લખવું.. સલામ તને.
ના સમજે જે કલમકારને એને માટે ઠાલા શબ્દો જ માત્ર. પણ આ તલવાર શા શબ્દો યુદ્ધ લડે છે તો ક્યારેક શાંતિ લાવે છે. કદાચ આ કૃતિ વાંચ્યા બાદ કોઈક વેશ્યાના જીવનમાં સુખ નામનો સૂરજ ઉગે તો એ પુણ્ય તારા નામે.
Doctor, you are really mastering the art of writing. Only a good writer can dare touch subjects, which have social importance and yet do justice poetically.
salam doctor sahab salam, wah kya likha hai. ek vaishya ka dard, uski zindagi apne bahot badhiya tarike se gazal me dali hai. sahi me shabd aapke shwas hai.
muje ye gazal ka vishleshan chahiye mil sakega?
અજય પટેલ. on November 12, 2006 at 10:39 am said:
આવા વિષય પર લખી ને તમે કંઈ કેટલી આવી નારીઓની વેદનાને વાચા આપી અને જગ સમક્ષ મુકી.
અને જે રીતે તમે “સુર્ય” શબ્દનો પ્ર્યોગ કર્યો છે એ એકદમ જ યોગ્ય છે.
Amit pisavadiya on November 12, 2006 at 11:33 am said:
એક ગણિકાની મનોવ્યથાનું શબ્દોમાં આલેખન કપરું છે પરંતુ અહી તમોએ જે શબ્દો રચ્યા તે ખરેખર કાબીલેતારીફ છે.
chetan framewala on November 12, 2006 at 12:30 pm said:
મુંબઈમાં ૧૦૪ નંબરના બસ રુટ માં મુસાફરી કરતાં આવા જ ભાવ ,આવી જ વ્યાથા જન્મે છે.
અને આ રુટ ની વિચિત્રતા એ કે એ બસ હાડ-માસની બાઝારથી નીકળી સૌથી ભવ્ય એવી બઝાર -ઝવેરી બઝાર પહોંચે છે..
દિવાળી પહેલાં ૧૦૪ માં મુસાફરી કરતાં થોડી પંકતિ લખયેલ ………..
સાંકડી- અંધારી ગલીઓમાં, ચાલ ઈશ્વરને શોધીયે
અધ્-ખીલી લાચાર કલીઓમાં, ચાલ ઈશ્વરને શોધીયે…
નાની કો’ બંધ ખોલીમાં ચુંથાતું યૌવન !
હર શ્રણ મરતી, જીંદગીઓમાં, ચાલ ઈશ્વરને શોધીયે…
તુજમાં-મુજમાં, જડ-ચેતનમાં, ક્યાંક તો, એ મળશે!
પર્મર્થની તાપણીઓમાં, ચાલ ઈશ્વરને શોધીયે….
જયદીપ on November 12, 2006 at 4:32 pm said:
સંવેદનશીલ વિષયવસ્તુ ઉપર એટલી જ સંવેદનશીલ રચના. વિશેષમાં કવિની વિચારશૃંખલાથી અવગત કરાવવા માટે પણ આભાર. એનાથી રચનાની દિશા વધુ સારી રીતે જાણી શકાઈ.
Bhavesh Jhaveri on November 13, 2006 at 12:21 am said:
Once again a marvellous gem from your quiver. With every new attempt you are culminating to zenith of glory in poetry/gazal writing. How do you strike such a nice balance between your personal & professional life.
With your special attitude & apitude,
You’ve change the way to look at a prostitute,
This institute comes into existence because of destitute
Bhavesh Jhaveri – Kharwarnagar, Surat
radhika on November 13, 2006 at 9:43 am said:
Saturday, November 11, 2006
Saturday, August 19, 2006
Wednesday, July 26, 2006
Wednesday, June 28, 2006
Tame sacha arth ma ek anokha kavi chho. Decermber 2005 thi lai ne Novenber 2006 sudhi ma aape 100 uprant ni kavitao lakhi chhe pan ema kayam koi navin vat vanchava madi chhe.
veshay ni vaividhyata ane spashtata j aapna lakhan ma madi chhe evi kyay nathi madi.
khas kari ne stri patro ne dhyan ma lai ne lakhayeli gazal vadhu vedhak chhe …
e uparthi j taran kadhu k aap sacha arthma ek kavi chho, karan k ek kavi j bijanai taklif dard ane lagni ne khud par vethe chhe tyarej aavi sundar gazal nu nirman kari shake chhe.
Anonymous on November 13, 2006 at 4:46 pm said:
surya ni jem tapTa sabdo nu taaPnu kadi tharva na dejo…..lakhta rahejo emaj shwash ni unap vartava na dejo…….
UrmiSaagar on November 14, 2006 at 1:46 am said:
પ્રિય મિત્ર વિવેક, સલામ…!
આ અતિ સંવેદનશીલ વિષયની સાર્થક રચના બદલ ખૂબ ખૂબ અભિનંદન!
‘વૈશ્યાનું અસ્તિત્વ’ – એ ચિત્ર છે, આપણા આ પુરુષપ્રધાન સમાજની કમજોરીનું અને એ કમજોરી દ્વારા પોષાતી રહેતી સ્ત્રીની મજબૂરીનું! પહેલાં તો આ ગઝલ વાંચીને અવાક જ થઇ ગઇ… પછી ફરી ફરીને વાંચી…થયું, આટલાં સંવેદનશીલ વિષયને અડીને આપણા સમાજની આ કુરૂપતા અને કડવી હકીકતને તમારા તીવ્ર શબ્દોનાં કપડાં પહેરાવીને પણ નગ્ન તો તમે જ કરી શકો!
Hats off to you…
Manish on November 14, 2006 at 10:03 am said:
I m Wordless….simply surrendered to the bitter truth……… Nice VIV.
Nirmit on November 15, 2006 at 11:54 am said:
You are just awesome man. ur poems are also awesome.A master of poem having devine sense of writing thats u man.
Chetan Shah on November 15, 2006 at 12:22 pm said:
Aankh ma ahsru ane hraday ma saddagta surya sathe….
” Jagat na aavveg shant karnari Naari ne koti koti vandan …”
Shiv e zaher pidhu ne “Nilkhanth” kevayaa… jene SURYA pidho ene su kahevu??? Koine shabbdo nahi male, muskil chhe !!!!!!!!!
Jaffer Kassam on November 15, 2006 at 5:23 pm said:
After a long time, I read a beautiful
Kaveeta. I just regret that I do not write in Gujrati as I do not have Gujrati fonts in my PC. Keep writing and let all thoe Gujrati reader enjoy.
Anonymous on November 15, 2006 at 5:39 pm said:
You are a crap. You are psuedo minded sex maniac, Who
seems to seek sex by sadistically writing poems and
trying to entice girls/women.
You like publicity and cheap popularity that’s why you
bombard everybody with your silly crap poetry. Stop
sending poems you shamless sex machine.
True poets never bombard any body.
And your poetry is shit, no depth, no poetic diction
and no ornamenatal values, it is real non-sense.
You are a crap poet, your oetry stinks and your
imagination is as stinky as that Sun of prostitute.
take care stay classy and cheer-up!
Behave like a man not like an ass!
bye you sinster poet.
Anonymous on November 15, 2006 at 9:26 pm said:
Hello Dr.. Viivek tailor
thanx for posting such a great blog all the way for all gujju poetry lovers,…
As I like all ghazals by u. But this is something which touches the heart. Really , Truelly n Heartly thanx and congratulations to u sir.
May Gujju poetry always Shine with the efforts of u.
UrmiSaagar on November 16, 2006 at 9:16 am said:
Jayshree on November 16, 2006 at 9:43 am said:
I totally agree, Urmi.
જોવાનું એ છે, કે જેને ટીકા કરવી છે, એ પોતાનું નામ સુધ્ધા જણાવી શકતા નથી.
જાહેરમાં અભિપ્રાય આપવા જેટલી હિંમત નથી, એ લોકો કોઇનું દર્દ શું સમજે ?
kedar on November 16, 2006 at 11:11 pm said:
hats off to u…
superb imagination in a tochy way that directly pierces the heart…
Anonymous on November 16, 2006 at 11:51 pm said:
well i am not good enough in understanding some of the gujarati words and phrases but i will only say that when people get a chance they will never let there self to criticize or find faults in others but had they ever think that are they able to write or discuss on such potential subject???.NO!!!
Poet never writes for any sort of pleasure.Since i know dr vivek he is working and helping out people in all ways and he in return doesn’t expect anything and thats his inborn nature and now we can see the same depth of feelings in his poems/ghazals.
he just wrote the fact and i feel its not only the pain of prostitute but also about a female who has not accepted her man as a hushband(pati parmeshwar!!!!)no doubt she lives with him till death!!!!!
સુરેશ જાની on November 20, 2006 at 7:09 am said:
આટલા બધા વખાણ થયા પછી, થોડું કડવું લખવાની હિમ્મત કરું છું.
સમાજના આ કલંક ને બહાદુરી પૂર્વક કવિતામાં લાવ્યા તે યોગ્ય છે, પણ જાતીય અંગોને લખાણમાંથી દૂર રાખવાની પ્રથા અને મર્યાદા તોડવા જેવી નથી.
આમાંથી ઘણા અનર્થો થઇ શકે છે. નેટ આવા દૂષણોથી ખદબદે છે, અને ખાસ કરીને યુવા પેઢીને ગુમરાહ કરે છે.
અભિવ્યક્તિના અને ભાવના ઊંડાણના જે શિખરે તમારી કલમ પહોંચી છે , તેને મલિન ન બનાવો. તમારી કલમમાં એ તાકાત છે, જે સુરૂચિનો ભંગ કર્યા વગર આ વ્યથાના વલોપાતને પૂરે પૂરો અભિવ્યક્ત કરી શકે તેમ છે. જાતીયતા ગોપીત જ રહે તેમાં શ્રેય અને ગૌરવ છે.
Mehul Shah on November 24, 2006 at 11:21 am said:
… અને હું માનું છું કે ના તો આમાં બહાદુરી બતાવવાનો સવાલ છે કે ના કલમને મલિન બનાવવાનો..જે તમે લખ્યું એ સરળ અને સીધા શબ્દોમાં લખ્યું…અને તેથી જ એ ચોટદાર છે.. ‘સારા’ શબ્દોના મ્હોરા પહેરાવવાથી કે દ્વિઅર્થી લખવાથી..જે સમજી શકે છે એને કોઈ ફરક નથી પડવાનો.. અને જેને કાવ્યનો ભાવાર્થ સમજવામાં તકલીફ પડે છે એને આપણે ગેરમાર્ગે દોર્યે છીએ..કદાચ આ જ કારણે સંભવતઃ એનો ગુજરાતી કવિતાઓમાંથી રસ ઊડી જાય …ખાસ કરીને યુવાપેઢી જ..જે કવિતાના ભારે ભરખમ શબ્દો, ઉપમાઓ, અલંકારોથી ભાગે છે..હું મારા મિત્રોની જ વાત કરુ છું !
Siddharth on November 27, 2006 at 8:38 am said:
તમારી કવિતાઓ સરસ જ હોય છે. પરંતુ આ કવિતા માટે હું સુરેશભાઈ સાથે સહમત છું. દરેક વસ્તુ કલમ દ્ધારા રજૂ થઈ શકે છે, પરંતુ કલમકારનાં હાથમાં છે કે એ કલમનો ઉપયોગ કઈ રીતે કરે છે. મને એવુ લાગે છે કે આ જ વ્યથા થોડાક અલગ શબ્દો વડે રજૂ થઈ શકી હોત, અને તમારા જેવા શબ્દોના કારીગર માટે એ અશક્ય તો નથી જ.
આપણે બધા જ જાણીએ છીએ કે “Bandit Queen” કેમ આટલી સફળ ભારતમાં થઈ હતી. Sex ખરેખર સુંદર વસ્તુ છે પરંતુ એટલા માટે એને Grossly રજૂ કરવાનુ જરૂરી નથી. દરેક સુંદર વસ્તુનું જાહેર પ્રદર્શન યોગ્ય તો નથી જ…
આ કવિતા વાંચતા ક્યાક સુરુચી ભંગ થતો હોય એવુ તો લાગે જ છે.
બાકી, તમે ખરેખર સરસ જ લખો છો અને ખેલદિલપૂર્વક કોઈ પણ નેગેટીવ કે ન ગમતા પ્રતિભાવોને હટાવ્યા વગર બહાદુરીથી બ્લોગ પર રજૂ કરો છો એ જીંદાદીલીની વાત છે. કહેવાતા આગળ પડતા બ્લોગરો પાસે પણ આવી ખેલદિલી તો નથી જ.
piyush on November 27, 2006 at 8:33 pm said:
I sometimes think that many authors and poets commits a mistake in the later part of their career. Khuswant Singh touched the same subject and I heard Rasik Mehta did it too. You are also touching same subject.
This subject is normally touched by mediocre writers and you don’t have to join their club.
Unless, unless you use “Slesh” alankar – such subjects hold no beauty. And specially your poem did not have that “Slesh”. Its obvious and implied meaning both were filthy.
Anonymous on November 28, 2006 at 11:26 am said:
સુરજ બે જાંઘ વચ્ચે સુર્ય ઘુસી ગયો, શાયદ ફરી ઉગશે સોચાલયમા.
બન્ધુ,ઉર્દુના શ્રી ક્રિશ્નચન્દ્ર કે સાહીર લુધ્યાંવીની નઝ્મોઆ વિષય પર વાંચી હોત તો આવુઁ વાહિયાત કવિતા(લવિતા)વેશ્યાની ઝાંઘ પર ઉગતે નહીઁ.આખોને આખો સુરજ ઘુસાડીદીધો. આ ઓપરેશન કયાઁ કરેલુઁ. અચલ
Anonymous on November 29, 2006 at 3:45 am said:
Honestly! I had little hard time understanding this creation. It may be because I don’t read Gujarati that often or may be because i am from out side of India where little things like this don’t make this much commotion.
I read the poem and i read the comments from all the readers. This could easily be translated into a tale about a young man who is living in a fast pased life.
This is a delicate subject and I congratulate Vivekbhai for putting his hands in snake’s pitt. Its a bitter truth of our society.
Anonymous on November 30, 2006 at 4:40 am said:
I stumbled on your blog and read lots of your poems many of them are wonderful but this one sucks by all means.
I read all comments and your response as well. You really worked hard to generate your reponse but still it seems inadequate. I have read Ramayana and other scriptures…at times this delicate issue is discussed but in very nice way and not in the way you have mentioned here. You really dwelled deep to find something worthwhile for your defence but all you could found from all these great “granthas”, something which essentially suits your purpose. This is so ridiculous. You are doctor so definately smart and on top of that you know how to play with words but that does not hide your shameless acts. It is a pitiable situation that educated people use their smartness and intellect to justify their wrong ideals and cause. There are tons of other subjects but you know something controversial and related to sex would definately make your site more popular. After all controversy is publicity without efforts.
Lots of poets and writers have written about this wonderful subject but very few crossed the border of “Ashlilata”. You shamelessly did that.
On a different note, now a days it is rarity to have somebody die of starvation. Prostitutes in most countries choose this profession not to meet the basic needs but to make more money and enjoy comfortable lifestyle. We see reports of everyday collegegirl turning to prostitution for extra pocketmoney. I am based in USA where girls choose this profession by choice and not by force and probably same may be true for lots of other places. There may be few who have been coerced into this profession but largely it is by choice in current age and time. So this pain is something they chose to have with all the money they receive with it.
If one is strong enough and decide to live on ideals they can still survive without being prostitutes, but again that is separate discussion.
I don’t think you did any poetic justice to anybody. I realize that people have praised you for this but hey listen it is a fashion in community to praise somebody who goes against the flow and lately this is fashion in our society so I personally think what you have written is absolutely “BULLSHIT” as far as this poem goes.
At the same time God has given you this wonderful ability to play with words…use it to generate hope, to generate momentum, to motivate people in direction which takes them to path of progress.
“jya na pahoche kavi, tya pahoche ravi”. You can use your power to bring somebody out of absolute hopelessness, you can use this to praise what has been bestowed upon us – wonderful nature, singing birds and lots of other things.
If you think of prostitute, go to one and tell her this poem personally may be she will not charge you but do not publicly display the dirt in your mind.
I am harsh here in my opinion which I am usually not but I think it is pretty much required here.
Atul on December 1, 2006 at 2:23 pm said:
Atleast U have guts to come out with your name & e-mail. Thank god…
I am happy that we are living in Swarn-yug again where there is no forceful prostitution & starvational deaths take place… Great! Now India & the rest of the world will have no problem, right?
You said:”On a different note, now a days it is rarity to have somebody die of starvation. Prostitutes in most countries choose this profession not to meet the basic needs but to make more money and enjoy comfortable lifestyle.”
-WOW! That’s cool, yaar! Where on the earth do you live, man? The annual average income in one billion men country India is 1250… That makes One hundred rupees per month & this income has been averaged up with incomes of all middle class & upper class men… So, how much a poor might be earning in India?
And do you know the figures of child abuse & child selling for the sake of prostitution in India? Parents themselves sell their children for the sake of only 100-500 rupees… Not in dollars, man! Want to buy a girl for you? Come to Bihar & U.P…
Just as you said that by mere stating few Shlokas from Ramayan, the sanskriti doen’t look polluted, your statement doesn’t wipe away the cruel facts of the current scenario which is no better than yesterday..
Poor doctor… I am witnessing his stand since long…You people didn’t even get to the core of his sayings. If you can keep your mind open, all you will find is his desier to show that India is having the Clearest, most transparent, Honest & boldest of heritage in the world… No where ever that poor Doc has ever said that Indian heritage is dirty & filthy. Whatever has been said by him in his defence is a matter to take pride for us…
It takes great courage not to delete such filthiest comments before it reaches to the world… Accepting bricks alongwith bouquets takes lots of bravery…
The RAMAYAN which we all read is polluetd. As he has mentioned in his sayings, I too recommand you all to read RAMAYAN NI ANTARYATRA by Nagindas Sanghvi, where you can see the results of reasearch of most learned pandits for decades where you can find more than three hundred verses written about sex openly. Well, quoting those verses means not seeking permission to act vulgarity in general. His true & sole intention was to make our polluetd minds clear of the era-old dust. The doc just wanted to show the openness of our minds in the past & we all proved the closeness of our minds in the present…
GREAT JOB, DOC! You made everyone vomit out their own pollution…
I am reading your blog since 1 year & in around 100 poems I have read, this one is perhaps the first with such topic. Even then people would like to say that you come up with vulgarity to get fame!!!
Everyone understand the facts beneath their skins…
Lagey raho, doctorsaheb…Hathi chale to kutra to bhasva na j !
Anonymous on December 1, 2006 at 5:53 pm said:
Atleast U have guts to come out with your name & e-mail. Thank god…
I am happy that we are living in Swarn-yug again where there is no forceful prostitution & starvational deaths take place… Great! Now India & the rest of the world will have no problem, right?
You said:”On a different note, now a days it is rarity to have somebody die of starvation. Prostitutes in most countries choose this profession not to meet the basic needs but to make more money and enjoy comfortable lifestyle.”
-WOW! That’s cool, yaar! Where on the earth do you live, man? The annual average income in one billion men country India is 1250… That makes One hundred rupees per month & this income has been averaged up with incomes of all middle class & upper class men… So, how much a poor might be earning in India?
And do you know the figures of child abuse & child selling for the sake of prostitution in India? Parents themselves sell their children for the sake of only 100-500 rupees… Not in dollars, man! Want to buy a girl for you? Come to Bihar & U.P…
Just as you said that by mere stating few Shlokas from Ramayan, the sanskriti doen’t look polluted, your statement doesn’t wipe away the cruel facts of the current scenario which is no better than yesterday..
Poor doctor… I am witnessing his stand since long…You people didn’t even get to the core of his sayings. If you can keep your mind open, all you will find is his desier to show that India is having the Clearest, most transparent, Honest & boldest of heritage in the world… No where ever that poor Doc has ever said that Indian heritage is dirty & filthy. Whatever has been said by him in his defence is a matter to take pride for us…
It takes great courage not to delete such filthiest comments before it reaches to the world… Accepting bricks alongwith bouquets takes lots of bravery…
The RAMAYAN which we all read is polluetd. As he has mentioned in his sayings, I too recommand you all to read RAMAYAN NI ANTARYATRA by Nagindas Sanghvi, where you can see the results of reasearch of most learned pandits for decades where you can find more than three hundred verses written about sex openly. Well, quoting those verses means not seeking permission to act vulgarity in general. His true & sole intention was to make our polluetd minds clear of the era-old dust. The doc just wanted to show the openness of our minds in the past & we all proved the closeness of our minds in the present…
GREAT JOB, DOC! You made everyone vomit out their own pollution…
I am reading your blog since 1 year & in around 100 poems I have read, this one is perhaps the first with such topic. Even then people would like to say that you come up with vulgarity to get fame!!!
Everyone understand the facts beneath their skins…
Lagey raho, doctorsaheb…Hathi chale to kutra to bhasva na j !
Anonymous on December 2, 2006 at 6:42 pm said:
It would have been more courageous if you had posted your email address, anyways…
The gist of the matter of my earlier comment was that, there is no need to use explicit words the same message could have been conveyed in a different way without being obviously crude.
You can call somebody “Surdas” or “Andha”. But the first word will convey same msg. without much provocation.
I hope you understand what I meant to say. Otherwise none of us mind for any poet to bring out the bad side of society, it is a matter of how you portray it in words.
I would suggest you to read some extensive literature of front runners of gujarati literature and you will notice how delicately they have handled this type of issue without sounding vulgar or explicit.
Dr. Vivek, has certainly done a great job and we all commend him for his wonderful creations but that does not mean that he should never be criticized.
We can discuss the right and wrong here till the end of the world but everybody is entitled to their own opinion and I guess both of us have very strong opinion only thing it is not the same.
I invite you to share your opinion to my email address so general population does not feel that we are fighting in public.
Anonymous on December 6, 2006 at 11:20 pm said:
આપણાં સમાજમાં હજુ અંગત વાતો જાહેરમાં સ્વીકૃત નથી જ.
તમારી હિંમત ખરેખર કાબિલે-તારીફ છે. પણ નથી સુરેશભાઇ ખોટા ,
ના અતુલભાઇ, ના રાજેશભાઇ. તમે ઘણી જ નિખાલસતાથી પ્રતિભાવોને
આવકાર આપ્યો છે, તે બદલ અભિનંદન.
આપણા સંસ્કાર કહો કે, ભારતીયતા……. હું પોતે, આ
કાવ્ય ત્રીજા પ્રય્તને વાંચી શકી. અને એટલું ચોક્કસપણે કહી શકું કે,
પંકિત નો વારંવાર પ્રયોગ કરવાથી કાવ્ય અભદ્ર બન્યું છે. આટલા
સુંદર સૂર્યાસ્તને જોઇને અન્ય ઘણા સુંદર કાવ્યો આપ રચી શકો છો. અને
ગોપનીયતામાં જ ગરિમા આપણી સંસ્કૃતિની રહેલી છે. વિષયવસ્તુ ખરેખર
નવીન અને આવકારદાયક છે. પરંતુ એક ગણિકાનું આત્મસન્માન જળવાય
અને હૃદય ના નંદવાય તેવા જ શબ્દોમાં…….
શબ્દો જેમ તમારા શ્વાસ છે ,
તેમ તમે પણ ગુજરાતી ભાષાનાં શ્વાસ બની રહો તેટલા તમે યોગ્ય છો
અને અમારી ઇશ્વરને પ્રાર્થના પણ છે કે ,
તમે ગુજરાતી ભાષાનાં શ્વાસ બની રહો.
kiritkumar bhakta on December 13, 2006 at 5:10 am said:
મારી અને તમારી બેન દીકરીની આબરુ સાચવતો,
બે જાંઘની વચ્ચેનો સુર્ય્.
નર્મદ સુરત સિવાય બીજે પેદા થઈ જ શકે…
vijay jani on December 19, 2006 at 4:17 pm said:
Fari ek vaar gazal ne pratibhavo vanchya. Nirate ne shant chitte.
Apne ketla dambhik chie te fari thi majbut thau.
Vastaviktao ni taraf aankho minhci ne gujarati sahitya ma sahitya ne naame ghanu lakhau che pan jyare kadavi Vastavikta same aave tyare apshabdo sivay ghana paase kaij hotu nathi.
Tame haju lakho ne lakhta raaho.
akshat on December 20, 2006 at 4:24 pm said:
I am living in Bangkok and witnessing the “dark” world much better. Women are much more respected in this land than any where else regardless thier profession.
“Ganika” use to be one of the most respected personality in the town, I am talking about ANCIENT INDIA (the golden era of indian history). The brothel house use to be centre of arts and culture. No doubt it was much more a kind of amusement park for adults.
So in the name of Indian culture what ever we are trying to establish,needless to say, its nothing but the hangover of Victorian and Islamic era. Or we have understood as a best practice to follow and adopt in our society.
Liked the poem so much, or i should say i have ever read such ‘sexo-philosophical’poem !!!
Vishal Ariwala on December 21, 2006 at 2:55 pm said:
I am agree with Mr. Akshat, as a Ganika was considered as a Most Respectable in ancient india. But now-a-days the peoples perceptions about prostitute has changed. though she is serving a society and keep vasana satisfied to avoid any unwated things like Rape and viciousness of people. but I dont understand why People still sticks to their orthodix thinking.
Anyway keep it up.
Jam Saheb on December 22, 2006 at 2:11 pm said:
guts since 1985 on December 30, 2006 at 11:11 am said:
I went through all the comments on this poem.
No comments about the poem or the writer from my side,
But yes, rather then discussing this issue,its appreciated if we can do something for this issue.
abdul rahim on December 30, 2006 at 7:45 pm said:
dhaval gajjar on February 13, 2007 at 7:36 pm said:
jabrajast gazal che aa. mane to bahooj gami aa gazal
aa tiwce meaning per che pan samaj van ni vaat che
i like so much.
give me ur contct no??
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sem on February 16, 2007 at 1:18 pm said:
salaam hu Tamne nahi kahu koi janm thi wiasya nathi hoti pan ek majbur aurat ane ek lachar stre jayre koi hawas na Bediyana sikar thiy ne waisya na nagar taraf jay che mate vivek Bhai khotu na lagad tha tame mane ek stre shokh thi tayel waisya batoo to hu manu
Ravi Solanki on June 15, 2010 at 2:20 pm said:
BAHU SARAS LAKHYU CHHE, SAMAJE GHANU BADHU SIKHVU RAHYU AA PRERNA PAR THI,,, TAMNE BAHU BAHU ABHINANDAN BHAI,,,,,
digisha sheth parekh on June 16, 2010 at 2:36 pm said:
bahu manomanthan pachii aa rachana upasi hase nai??aa rachana ane ene maleli comment joi…hu too vachati j rahi gai…sachu j pushp ane kanta banne varshya che…pan jordar kalam dode che tamariii ava topic ne amm shabdo ma varnava aghara che…himmat bharyu kam che ke jaher ma lakhyu tame…practicle duniya che emani…ne koi kharab nathi…congrats…koi nu dard pote feel karvu ne ene samji ne kalam thi sabdo ma utarvuuu e kavi j kari sake….
bahu j time pachi hu tamari website par aviiii pan aa vachii amm choki gaii….gd one
વિવેક on June 16, 2010 at 4:51 pm said:
'jit' chudasama on July 18, 2010 at 6:53 pm said:
ભૂખ, પીડા, થાક, ઈચ્છા, માનના અશ્વો વિના ય,
રથ સતત હંકારતો બે જાંઘની વચ્ચેનો સૂર્ય.
અનામી on August 27, 2010 at 7:09 pm said:
આપનો ખુબખુબ આભાર વિવેકભાઈ…
Dr. Akhtar Khatri on February 15, 2013 at 4:58 pm said:
વિવેક on February 16, 2013 at 10:33 am said:
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