text: I suggest that you rewrite that part.  For example;  Gilman's 'The Yellow Wallpaper' illustrates her belief that one should take responsibility for their own decisions rather than allowing others to control them.  It appears that her view of life is that to allow others such a level of control prevents the individual from fulfilling the potential of their life.\nI think that you should include some quotes to illustrate why you believe this to be the case.