(Hey, I really like that piece! Awesome look into Sashi's psyche.<br/><br/>I actaully got pulled in at the big fight - there really was no question about who was in charge throughout it, and you caught the helpless emotion really well.<br/><br/>One request, though - ocean of text! Put some paragraphs into it (or, on a board like this which doesn't permit paragraphing, put a blank line where you'd normally indent).  For example, every time someone new speaks, they should get a paragraph.  It just makes it easier to read, heh.<br/><br/>Still, it's very good. ^_^ I can't wait to see what happens next!)