<span style="color: #00BF00">(( Ross, if you want to describe the details, such as the buttons in an elevator you should probably string those details together into an action that gives my character something to react to, or some dialog to respond to. This is actually a good tip for everyone. You do it right most of the time, Ross, so don't think I'm being too harsh.<br/><br/>For example, Instead of splitting the post into several smaller posts, you could easily concatenate them, because there is generally no opportunity between the actions that you described for Merrin to do anything meaningful. You could turn those three posts into one, like this:<br/><br/><blockquote class="uncited"><div> Ross held Merrin's hand as they walked in. "My place in the top floor with a built in elevator to get down fast." Ross explained leading Merrin to an elevator that only had two buttons, G-Floor and L-Floor. Ross led her into the elevator and pressed the L-Floor button as the Elevator's doors close and began going up. <br/>+<br/>Once they had reached the top floor, Ross showed Merrin his apartment (descriptive details go here).<br/></div></blockquote><br/>Okay, that's enough whining from me for the moment. ))</span><br/><br/><span style="color: #00BF00">Once they had reached the top floor, Merrin followed Ross into his apartment. She scanned the room for its details, wanting to see Ross's taste in decoration as well as looking for a place to sit. "You have a nice place, Ross. Do you mind if I have something to drink?" she asked.</span>