sentence: As the secretary of the English Language club , I am writing this proposal to persuade you as to why it would benefit both the students and the college if we received funding from you .
modified: As the secretary of the English Language club I am writing you this proposal to persuade you as to why it would benefit both the students , and the college if we would receive funding from you .
transformation: PUNCT, PRON, PUNCT, VERB:TENSE, VERB:TENSE