Air transport is increasingly used to export agricultural products to countries where they are not grown or are out of season. Some people think this is a good thing while others think this is unjustified. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Nowadays, we can easy to find American Grapes,Thailandrice, mango etc. which are not grown here or out of season in the supermarket. That's because the air transport is widely used to export or import agricultural products between countries. Is it a positive development? Personally, I feel that whether it is good or bad depends on the individual's attitude.
Firstly, importing the agriculture products can give people more choice on the food selection. For example, vegetables are hard to grow in some desert area, but people still can enjoy the fresh vegetable every day benefits from the air transport. Moreover, different kind of vegetables or fruits contains different ingredient. If we can buy the other country's product, it can help us to have the choice to maintain a more balance diet.
Furthermore, exporting goods to other countries can help the exporter country to expand its superiority of agricultural and bring more profit to the economy. It also provides more job opportunities for some industries, like the agricultural, transportation and trade etc.
On the other hand, selling the imported products may have negative impact on the local agricultural that's why some people think it is unjustified. It is easy to image that if the imported goods with a better quality are in the similar price as the local product, people properly would choose the imported product. That result the local products are dull of sale. Besides, it is not eco-friendly because air transport use massive amount of fuel and greatly add to global warming and pollution.
In sum, using air transport to export or import agriculture products is good to both countries and their citizens. But it would be better if government can make some rules to protect the local industries. At the mean time, individuals should buy the local organic food and support the environment friendly brands.
HI Christyzhongs and thanks for this essay!
The essay is clear and well organized. Some good ideas, and good use of paragraphs.
I would change two things: the thesis sentence and the first sentence in the conclusion.
The thesis sentence and the sentence before it ("Is it a positive development? Personally, I feel that whether it is good or bad depends on the individual's attitude. ") could be used in a million essays. Why lose this opportunity to make it specific and show the examiner that you understand the topic and to show some extra task-related vocab?
I think consumers have to weigh up having an increased choice of food with the possible effect on local farmers.
While most people enjoy having a variety of food from different countries, we also need to think about the environmental cost and the effect on farmers in our own country.
You didn't develop the theme of the 'individual's attitude' in your sentence. Make sure you develop and support all your ideas. Even though the sentence looks like a generic sentence, you could have made it into a main point in your essay, but you missed this opportunity.
The first sentence in your conclusion says that air transport is good. However, the previous sentence said it has a bad effect on the environment. This sequence of sentences of doesn't make sense! Have a look at the official descriptors for IELTS Task 2 Writing (public version) here, under Coherence and Cohesion. Band 6 requires that the candidate "arranges information and ideas coherently" - make sure that you mark changes in ideas and don't make sudden switches without explanation.
It also provides more job opportunities for some industries, like the agricultural, transportation and trade etc → It also provides more job opportunities for industries such as agriculture, transportation and trade.
That result the local products are dull of sale → The result would be that local products would have lower sales. OR As a result, sales of local products might drop.
The last part of this sentence should be separate.
Selling imported products may have a negative impact on the local agricultural that's why some people think it is unjustified.
Some people think imports are not acceptable because of their impact on local agriculture.
Overall, a nice clear essay with good supported ideas. Just work hard on a good thesis sentence, and make sure your conclusion summarizes the body of your essay.