Tsurayuki's financial troubles start to weigh on his health, but Kyoya has a plan that might be just what his housemate needs.
I also think there might be too 
much narration, relatively speaking.
.كما أعتقد أنّ هنالك سردا كثيرا، بطريقة نسبية
Außerdem ist da vielleicht
zu viel Erzähltext.
Además, se ve como mucho texto.
Además, parece mucho texto.
Ensuite, il y a beaucoup de monologues,
j’aimerais plus de dialogues.
E poi forse c'è anche un po' troppa narrazione.
E acho que tem muita narração aqui.
А ещё, пожалуй,
повествования слишком много.