text: Hey guys, I wrote a short story that I was hoping to get any feedback/criticism on. This is my first time writing a short story and also my first time posting to Reddit, and I appreciate any feedback. As they did every Sunday, Nora brought her daughter Jill to a new place for their mommy-daughter day. Jill skipped along side her mother as they made their way towards a towering glass building. Nora knew that Jill looked forward to Sundays because she was mostly absent during the week. It's a sacrifice, but I'm doing important work. She would tell herself that while trying to justify that what she was doing was the right thing. After all, it wasn't like Jill's father was around to support them. And these weekends together would make up for the lost time during the week. The automatic glass doors swooshed open as Jill leapt through. "C'mon mommy!! Huurrrryy!" Jill was energetic, curious, and intelligent like her parents. She was only four but was already reading like a second grader. "Oooo" Jill coo'd as she stared at a sphere hovering above a small pool of water. "Where are we today mommy?" "This is a One World Science Exhibition honey." It was after the last World War that the leaders of the world realized our eventual fate. Whether it was because they had finally smartened up or because nearly a tenth of the world's population had died, they finally decided to cooperate. Military funding worldwide was redirected towards science and technology. Together, the smartest minds in the world would come together and invent ways for us to flourish as a species. This was the start of the One World movement. A movement uniting the world towards one goal; longer healthier lives for all people, regardless of race or religion. One World Science and Technology Exhibition's opened up all around the world to showcase the remarkable breakthroughs that were being made and to foster a sense of unity. "There are places like this all over the world honey. It's like a celebration of what we as humans are capable of imagining." Jill's eyes darted from one exhibit to the next, eagerly bouncing in anticipation. "Stay with me, Jilly." Nora took her hand and led her to each exhibit, explaining the basic idea behind the invention and how it would benefit humanity. In the distance something caught Jill's eye. Her mother could tell that she wasn't listening to her anymore. Jill was silent. She stared intently down a dimly lit hallway. At the end of the hallway was a girl, barely Jill's age. She stood staring back for a moment and then walked around the corner. "I see you've noticed the main exhibit. Let's go take a look." Nora led Jill towards the hallway and around the corner. Against the wall was a cylindrical glass tank filled with water. And floating in the water was the a little girl. The same little girl that Jill had just seen in the hallway. "What.. who is she?" "This is Summer. She is the whole reason the One World Exhibits exist" Before Nora could continue explaining, Jill whispered, "She's lonely." "What was that honey?" "She's lonely and she doesn't understand what's going on." "Well I imagine she would be quite lonely Jilly" Nora knew Jill's imagination could run wild. "No mommy, she's telling me..." "Jill, Summer can't talk. She's been in here for over hundred years and no one has heard her talk." "But mommy..." "Listen Jilly..." Nora led her right in front of the glass tank. She took her hand and placed it on the glass. "Summer isn't alive. Do you know what that means?" "Yes mommy" "She died a long time ago and her body was preserved using technology." Jill was silent. Staring past Nora and straight into the blueish glow of the tanks water. But something was wrong. Nora turned around. Her eyes went wide as they stared straight at Summer's lifeless face. She was such a beautiful young girl. Much too young to have had her life taken from her. Her features were soft and her skin a light blueish gray. "Mommy..." Nora stood entranced by Summers face. "Mommy... she's not dead" Her eyes opened. And Nora screamed.