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Good morning,

My name is Jane Doe and I am interested in immigrating to Canada. My sister and her husband are currently living in Montreal and I have been recommended to you by a friend of theirs. I am French by nationality and was born and raised in Austria. I have a Diploma in Computer Science and have worked in the sales department of a Telecommunication Company for 8 years.

I am currently single and unemployed and my plan is to move to Montreal and live with my sister. My plan is to obtain a student permit and study Biology at The Science Academy in Montreal, applying for permanent residency after I graduate. However, I am open to other suggestions.

I am interested in consulting with you to discover what program would best fit me and to help me with submitting my application for permanent residency.

I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Best regards,
Jane Doe
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