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My mind draws up blanks every time
I try to think of a clever rhyme

Rhyming tends to make me feel boxed in,
and I end up throwing each one in a trash bin.

Every time I try, I only stare at the paper—
it makes me want to yell at it, "Bis später!*"

Sadly, I can't give in—it must be done,
and then I think sarcastically, "Oh, what fun."

I'm not surprised when I can't get ideas in an hour,
but it still turns my mood very sour.

Then I realize while I angrily curse
that because of this, I already miss free verse.
*Bis Später: In the German language, it's a way of saying good-bye.

Rhyming drives me nuts sometimes. This poem (somewhat ironically) tries to show this.

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fruitbatslyra Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2010  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Awesome! Very well written.

I have trouble with rhyming too. ^^
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NaomiHansen Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2010  Student Digital Artist
It's a pain, and that's one reason I never really got into the whole poetry thing.
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fruitbatslyra Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2010  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I know what you mean, I was trying to rhyme words for a song but it was a lot more difficult then I had expected. So it doesn't really rhyme that well.
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bookbunny9 Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Haha! I love this! It describes one's frustrations perfectly...
Loving the mixture of languages, too.
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NaomiHansen Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2010  Student Digital Artist
Ah, thanks. (And thanks also for the other s. I forgot to mention that.)
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bookbunny9 Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks for uploading deviations that are worth faving!
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NaomiHansen Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2010  Student Digital Artist
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