I'm curious to know more about it.
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I will be happy to give feedback to any member of the group and interested to read more of your friend's work.
This is a very abstract poem,and the words and phrases stand out alone by themselves, but as a poem I am not sure I am getting the meaning of it all. I see what Kirsty has said, but I confess to being confused on this one. I know that abstract is very popular these days, and maybe I am using the wrong word, and also my style is a lot more simple, whether that be a good thing or a bad thing.
It does seem to have a hopeless,almost weary tone to it though.
This is a difficult poem but I rather like it even though I don't really understand what it is about. I find the 'music' of the poem very pleasing and I find the subject matter mysterious and intriguing, although I do sense (maybe wrongly) that there is quite a dark side to it.
I would say that, whilst poems that hide their meaning are entirely legitimate for a writer to write, as a reader there is only so far one can go with them. It is a question of degree. Many poems of course hide something, and part of the pleasure of a poem can be teasing out some of the mystery. But many readers will want something tangible to start off with.
On another level, though, I found – like others – that I couldn't quite connect with the poet's message. But perhaps there isn't one – maybe it's intended for the ear only, rather than the mind. And there's nothing wrong with that!