text: The author does not suport his ideas well, because he draws the reader away from the topic many times, he doesn't support his thesis very well, and the evidence he does bring up are opinions or assumptions. The author provides to much on the "danger" aspect of it, and he should focus more on the "why" aspect of his idea . So, it would be best if he looked over his essay and ,with his thesis in mind, start over from scratch.To the principle of this school