Editing is a requirement, not a suggestion.

I did manage to force myself to read the entire book, but it required willpower and migraine meds. I would like to stress that the story in and of itself was engaging. My 2 star rating comes from the struggle to read it. There are misspellings. There are page-and-a-half paragraphs with 10s of commas that are basically marathon length run-on sentences. The most challenging aspect of reading this book was the often jarring tense shifts. There is no rhyme or reason to it and it often brought me painfully out of the story. I felt as though I were getting mental whiplash. And that was not helped by the fact that a ENTIRE chapter is repeated! All in all I applaud the efforts of the author to tell a story he wanted to tell. I just can't give a higher rating for this version. If he were to go through and correct the problems that are extant in what I have read, I would probably give a higher opinion. It just doesn't deserve it as the current version stands.

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