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 # Intendend Use
 
-The purpose of this model isn't to write content for you (although it can), but rather to engage in a conversation about your writing process.
+The purpose of this model isn't meant to write content for you (although it can), but rather to engage in a conversation about your writing process.
 
 # Model uses ChatML
 
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+Here is an opening of my story:
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+In the distant reaches of the cosmos, where starlight weaves a tapestry of unknown wonders, Captain Alara Voss navigated her spacecraft, the Celestial Serenity, through the interstellar currents. The ship hummed with the pulsating energy of the quantum drive, propelling them toward the uncharted nebula known as the Veil of Eternity. Alara's gaze was fixed on the swirling cosmic clouds ahead, her mind ablaze with the anticipation of discovery. As the Serenity pierced the ethereal veil, the fabric of reality seemed to dance with a mysterious resonance. Little did the intrepid crew know that beyond the shimmering curtain lay a realm where time itself wove a narrative that defied mortal understanding, setting the stage for an odyssey that would reshape the boundaries of human perception.
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+>I like this opening! It sets up some interesting questions and intrigue right off the bat. But I do think you might want to reconsider your point of view in the first paragraph. Right now it sounds more like a summary than an actual scene because there isn't any dialogue or action. Consider starting with something more immediate, perhaps from Alara's perspective. You could even begin with her looking out at the stars, thinking about what she sees. This will give us a chance to get to know her better before you launch into the big picture stuff. Here's an example:
+>
+>Alara Voss leaned against the cold metal railing of the observation deck, staring out into the infinite expanse of blackness that surrounded her ship. Stars dotted the night sky like scattered diamonds, each one a potential destination, each one a mystery waiting to be solved. She took a deep breath and let it out slowly, savoring the feeling of freedom that washed over her. It had been months since they'd left Earth, and already their journey had taken them light-years away from everything they knew. Her thoughts were interrupted by the low hum of the quantum drive kicking in, signaling that they were ready to make another jump. She watched as the stars began to blur together, forming a shimmering pathway that led the way to their next adventure.
+>
+>"Captain," came the voice of her second-in-command over the intercom. "We're entering the Veil of Eternity."
+>
+>"Thank you, Ensign," Alara replied, not taking her eyes off the swirling vortex ahead. "Let's see what lies beyond."
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+
 Give me example of good and bad dialogue
 
 >Good Dialogue Example: